this interested me a lot, and so i asked her quite a bit about it.

yes, that is a line from becoming me, by melody carlson. supposed to be a typical 16-yr-old's diary. ri-i-i-i-ight. here are 2 sentences from the text.

feeling fed up with nathan, and everything else, i told him that i preferred to go home.

of course, i agreed, telling myself that if by some chance jenny should become intoxicated... i'd be the designated driver to get us home safely.

how many 16-yr-olds would say, much less take the time to write, things like "preferred" or "intoxicated"? here is your creative writing exercise: exorcise the awkward-language demon from those sentences. i will give it a go.

i was pissed at nathan & told him to take. me. home. now.

so, i went along b/c when jen gets smashed, everyone thinks i am some hero des. driver, but really - it's the only way i ever get to drive her mustang.

i am not saying i am some teenager-whisperer or anything, and who the hula would want to be that anyway -- all's i am saying is that the language in this purported diary is unrealistic. the book would be more authentic if it were a first-person account, but not a diary.

so there.